Week 3 Story: Turtle and the Geese/ Prince and the King

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Once upon a time in a land far far away...

A Prince, Roger, looked out of his castle window high above the land and wondered what else could be out there. His father, the king, had always told him one day he would be able to explore and see whatever he wants in the land. Roger hated being patient. He loved exploring the castle and wandering around but never understood why he could not explore outside the castle property. The King would always just promise one day and that Roger must obey because he knows not what lies out there and is not old enough to go out.

And so it was, one night Roger decided on his own that he was old enough and he must go explore. He crept out of his room and quietly through the castle, trying to make as little noise as possible. He felt guilty, knowing his father had always told him to just be patient. But he just couldn't wait any longer. He finally reached one of the doors to exit the castle and thought to himself again if he was making the right choice. After much thought, he unlocked the door, turned the knob, and looked out. All he saw was trees and hills, so he creeped out and shut the door behind him, unlocked. At first, he was overwhelmed by nature and the trees and was angry his father never let him out, thinking there was no danger. Once he got closer to the edge of the forest, he started to get a tad concerned about danger. He felt uneasy but decided he had already made it this far. He continued to creep into the forest, the trees were now getting bigger and the moonlight started to dwindle as the tree canopies covered it. He felt scared. Suddenly, he heard some wrestling not too far away. He looked around but could barely see and was unsure what lurked around him. A large hog jumped out and stabbed him with his tusk. Roger fell, unable to get up, and quickly took his last breath.

In the morning, the King was awoken and told a door had been left unlocked. He immediately checked Roger's room and fell to the floor when he saw his bed empty. Guards went and looked for Roger, eventually bringing his body back to the castle. The King was distraught and could only keep thinking to himself if only Roger had listened.


Flying Turtle by Grandville

Authors Note

This story was recreated after the Turtle and the Geese. The plot and theme are similar but Roger replaces the turtle ad the King replaces the Geese. The theme is falling to death because of not listening. The turtle dies after not listening to the geese, as Roger dies not listening to his father.


Bibliography
Two Turtle Jakatas by Ellen Babbitt
https://sites.google.com/view/jatakas/turtle




Comments

  1. Hi Payton!
    First of all, this picture you used is very powerful, and it really invokes the message and plot of the original story. For many stories and young characters like Roger, I commonly see the theme of immaturity and impatient as the root of conflicts within the plot. Roger's curiosity of the world drove him to ultimately disobey and ignore the words of advice from his father.
    Great story, and I can't wait to read more!

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  2. Hi Payton! I like the originality and the route that you went with the story! It was definitely different from the original, but you portrayed the turtle's/Roger's impatience and foolhardiness well! It cost him his life, which shows the consequences of being foolish sometimes in the wrong situations. I like you also structured the story like a fairy tale, adding nostalgia for the reader too .

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  3. Hey Payton! I really enjoyed reading your story. It immediately reminded me of the Lion King, and how Simba disobeyed his father to go explore beyond the pride land. The part in which Roger hesitates for a long while stuck out to me. I wondered if he knew he shouldn't be leaving the castle; the long hesitation made me wonder what direction this story was going to take. Would Roger be happy with his decision to explore once this was all said and done? Or would Roger regret not listening to his father? I wondered about the relationship between Roger and his father. Did Roger have resentment towards the king, making him want to stray away from his father's orders? Or did Roger's curiosity just get the best of him. Maybe, if you wanted, you could try detailing that a bit more just to know Roger's state of mind the night he at last decided to leave the castle. I liked the progression into darkness as Roger entered the forest. What if you described in more detail the state of the trees when Roger first entered, and then how the environment became more ominous as Roger began to feel a sense of danger? Overall great story!

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  4. This story sounds almost exactly like Aladdin. Like Roger Jasmine always wants to leave the palace so she sneaks out too but she goes to the market place instead of the jungle/ forrest.While her venture had consequences she did not die like Roger. I also love your foreshadowing with the line " All he saw was trees and hills, so he creeped out and shut the door behind him, unlocked." Just adding that one word unlocked adds some suspense to the story. I also like the ambiguity of your story. Where we know what got him and that we know he died because you you used the words "quickly took his last breath." I like when people show not tell. I think that the beginning of your story could use this a little more and instead of you telling us how the father feels. You could tell a mini story about the father always telling Roger to stay in the palace.

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  5. Hi Payton! Almost every culture has epics that essentially warn children to do what their parents tell them or face awful consequences, and this is an excellent example of that cautionary tale (though a little more extreme than being grounded.) I really liked your retelling, because it's common to take human tales and replace them with animals but very rarely do people take the initiative to replace animals with humans. Good job!

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  6. Hi Payton! I think you have done a great job in making this tale relatable to everyone. You have kept the foundation of the lesson where if one does not listen, they can enter into trouble (or in this case his doom). However, you have made the character who gives the advice in the lesson a parent. I was amazed by this connection and interpretation of the story because I think it is so important but is easily forgotten. You have done a great job with it. I think no matter what culture, most people have the tendency to sometimes disregard what is told to us by our parents. This is something I have personally done, and the way you created your own twist has definitely showed me that I should probably listen to my parents more. Haha! I thank you, though, for teaching us this lesson again, because I needed it!

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  7. Hello Payton! I liked your rendition of the story and I can see some obvious parallels between the two stories. I like how your writing is concise and to the point. The story speaks directly to curiosity and carelessness, which inevitably lead the death of a young Roger. I do struggle to give ideas because it’s always difficult to gauge the writer’s intentions in its entirety but I’m going throw out an alternative. I enjoyed how you built up the scene as Roger scurries into the forest and I wonder if there’s an opportunity to paint a daunting image here by preying on the readers imagination. I think the dark is an innate fear that we all carry, and it might be possible to take advantage of this leading right up to the point where Roger gets gored. Suspense may not be what you are going for here and you may have just wanted to highlight how Roger chose a path that led directly to his death. Either way, thanks for sharing variation of “The Turtle and the Geese”, you have great way of telling stories while simultaneously providing principles!

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